Sydney Poetry

A social site for poets in Sydney.

Poem for Review: Arabanoo Lookout

Arabanoo Lookout

On the cold lookout

At Arabanoo

The sky that night

Black and inescapable,

Descended on us as all air,

And touched the spanned mirror

Of black water skin.

North Harbour reflected

A white discal moon

Full and edge-cut,

The flaring geometry

Dissolving in silvering flakes

Flickering Cabbage Tree Bay.

The ghost-coloured wash

On our hands and faces

Turned off in space

Reluming the shadowed pines,

Seeming a fine hairline

On the neck and crown

Of Manly and North Head.

Soaked in vastly mattered

Supernovaed space

I arced a small gap

To your hand.

But it was cold.

We stayed only momently,

You wrapped shivering in me

Banksia-filtered wind

Clung to its own shadows closely

And I was prepared for the car again

As we sensed the chilled bigness

Before us would remain unmatched.

1 member likes this

▶ Reply to This

Replies to This Discussion

Permalink Reply by David G Landgrebe on June 21, 2011 at 22:57

I like the creative courage (cool stuff)

▶ Reply

Permalink Reply by Dermott Ryder on March 23, 2012 at 9:32

David

I enjoyed the work enormously; it brought back memories of looking up at the wonderfully visible stars in the central north west of Western Australia. However, I will comment - with respect - that I found it easier to absorb and appreciate when I removed the capitalization at the start of every line and ignored what appeared to be the occasional random or accidental comma.

Nicely done – and thank you

Dermott Ryder