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"Up Yours"

I deny You/Your Equality

to Me/Fuck That/You greedy fucking

Pigfucker./.

That aint Me/That aint me/That aint me/Cause I hate
that worthless bitch/always trying to Come for Me/and
You know that bitch aint me/You can see for yourself
I
climb from
Superior Family Trees/Cause even my Hate
costs more than your Education/Bitch/

Freak/

Even My Precious

Privileged Hatred
marks me
as better

raises me up

as better

than you

you hairy
mindless
He-Beast/

Cause My Oppressive Hatred
Aint Me/Though Indeed
It
Separates Me/

and gives me the fucking right
gives me the fucking right

to Fuck You

and say "fuck you

you worthless bitch"/Cause
It's All ABout Me/
Yeah,
It's all about

My Need

to Fuck You Over

and say Fuck You

over and over/
and
and over and over/
Cause

That's My Freedom/Bitch
Your Slavery/.Cause That's My Freedom/Bitch
Your Slavery/.Cause That's My Freedom/Bitch

Your Slavery/...

28, September 2012
Amsterdam Holland

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Comment by Justin Lowe on October 2, 2012 at 11:31: Is this poetry or invective? Not sure this is the appropriate forum either way.

Comment by Dermott Ryder on October 2, 2012 at 13:31: Justin and Angel

My immediate response to this contribution is that it is invective. It demonstrates that not all contributors to ‘Sydney Poetry’ hold themselves to a sufficiently high standard before rushing into print. At the very least I suggest a re-examination of content, structure and presentation.

Beyond this, I am concerned to see work of this nature appear on the site. I believe it will have an alienating effect on other contributors in the same way that political diatribe and sectarian polemic will. For instance, I would not want to see the work of my friends or indeed my own work in proximity to this one.

Angel: I write this with good will. Please accept it as such. It is not my intention to inhibit the right of the writer to write in any style the writer deems appropriate however, may I suggest that you remember the idiomatic ‘horses for courses’ which means a racehorse performs best on a racecourse to which it is specifically suited. This concept, I believe, also applies to poetry.

Kindest Regards

Dermott Ryder

Comment by AutoPirate on October 3, 2012 at 1:06: man, is that spoken word? I see where you're coming from - you're appropriating the voice of a white oppressor...from my reading this is not invective but hard passionate street politics - a pedagogy of the oppressed, but correct if I'm wrong Angel

Comment by Adam Aitken on October 26, 2012 at 11:48: I always think that it's not the invective, cussin' and swearin' that's the interesting thing, or even offensive, but the words around it, if there is anything offered in the poem apart from cussin' and swearin' that is. Do the victim and the perpetrator play out something interesting here, or is it all one-sided? I like to see the context for the feeling, the catalyst, the STORY. Then there's a compelling drama happening.Without those things in a poem, the language is just language, an exercise, a rant, a release of pain, which is so necessary when we hurt, but on its own not poetry.