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a ME poem

I'm a twat
And a frosty one at that
Ice pick tongue
And a sledge hammer hat
Bullet riddled conscience
Trigger heart trap
Try to find the eye
In the strange soul
Of the human stump
Comes the slump of the insane guy
Me mummy me mummy memummyencummium
And some arseholes aeolian harp
The same fucking wind that blew past harmony
Just settled on a cig butt and a half eaten tragedy
Scream past me you mother fuckers
Ring your clatter bells
Trains taxis horse machines and lighted tortured smells
Olfaturate my skippered brain
Into a soft lit dell
Sleep and by a sleep I mean to insist
On dodging slings and arrows
Through a fucked up me me mist

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Comment by Country Boy on April 17, 2013 at 1:43: Dear Moderators,

This post is a repeat of a previous blog.
Only with a different title and the author does not seem active
(in a positive way) that I can tell.
It seems to be infantile doggerel, ie, 'Me mummy me mummy memummyencummium'.
Perhaps they forgot to take their medication?
Partial credits for rhyming lines #2 & #4, #20 & #22 and assonance in #13 & #14, etc.
I doubt this is a serious attempt to interest or entertain people
or share their thoughts and abide by the goals of this Forum. Prove me wrong...
(What is 'Olfaturate' supposed to mean? There is no such word.)
Saying 'me me' seems to be incomprehensible gibberish and wanders.

It seems to be a childish attempt to gain attention for some reason. There
are corners of the internet much more suitable for that behavior.
We suggest the author explain their rationale to ensure their credibility
remains untarnished. (If it was just a LOL, I can accept that also, though
it seriously worsens the signal/noise ratio.)

While I am pontificating, it is recommended that serious authors
at a minimum use guidelines.
Avoid obscenities and expletives as potty-mouth ramblings are very boring!
Punctuation and appropriate spacing, normal rules for writers, etc. (Be an iconoclast if you wish)
Spell-checkers are mandatory please use them. It shows little consideration for the audience otherwise.
Lower-case and upper (avoid all UPPER, difficult to read)
Proper URLS which are readable by humans, not obfuscated ones (ex http:xalwk23.com/3r4iusdfsj)
Refrain from copying and plagiarism. Include references to all quoted material
to ensure academic honesty and fair treatment from your peers.
Never attack another author in your replies. Just post honest feedback or criticisms, friendly banter or say nothing and move on.
This will help ensure that necessary standards are met. I realize I also have my faults and am endeavoring to improve and better myself constantly.