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Is this poem in some way a response to Rachelle's "Holocaust"?
It's not bad, but i think the meaning becomes a little too in your face, and the prose gets left behind at times to accommodate for only the meaning. I think that sometimes, and I'm sure some will differ, that we should be at mercy to words, and strive to find the right ones, the ones that just seem to be faultless, and perfect for what we are attempting to say. But that's being picky.
To deliver a message, it is a good peice.
No its in no way a response to her poem as it was written last year,
I just write and do my best, its my hobby so I'm sure there is lots of
thanks for comments